Inspecting to Inspire: 3 Ways Your Eyes Can Bring Pleasure – to Your Readers (Part 3)

    Inspecting to Inspire
    Inspecting to Inspire
    “Woman’s eyes.” © squaredot95.

    Welcome! This week’s post is about the mystery of our eyes and how they can help us improve our writing skill. I’m glad to see you here. If you missed parts one and two, that’s okay. You’re here for part three, and that’s what counts; so, let’s dive in!

    Look!

    For many, pleasure begins with the eyes. Maybe not as obsessively when we’re adults, but think about what young children teach us. In the department store, they see something and want it. Right then. Whatever they’re looking at appeals to their sight, whether it’s the color, style, size, or simply the fact that their best friend has one too. Understanding why your eyes are attracted to something is the first step to describing it in writing.

    I love watching the sun rise, so let’s start there. Sipping her hot coffee, she marveled at the sky as it changed before her eyes. The way pale yellow appeared, causing different shades of orange and pink to burst across the heavens, mesmerized her. Suddenly, the sun peeked above the horizon; and as it rose, the grass erupted in sparkles as dewdrops danced in the light. She smiled at the ground and glanced back at the rising sun. It had climbed higher than she anticipated; and the brightness of it caused her to flinch unexpectedly, spilling her coffee in her lap. She leapt from her seat, chanting obscenities, and running around like a cat after a bath.

    Here, light is the key player. Many times, colors are the first things we notice about something, depending on what other physical properties it has. (This is not a bash at my colorblind friends or the visually impaired. In a lot of cases, these individuals can describe things much better than those who can see.)

    Did you see that?

    Sometimes, we don’t see the whole story. Too often, we see what we want to see and not what is truly presenting itself. The really fun part is being able to create absolutely any turn of events in your story that you want. You can describe what you physically see and then visualize the rest.

    Once her legs were no longer burning, she looked down with frustration at her coffee-stained pajama bottoms and sighed heavily. With her hands on her hips, she threw her head back and growled at the sky. At once, she heard an odd noise coming from the ground in front of her. She looked down to find a squirrel pointing at her with its claw and giggling.

    “That was hilarious,” it said.

    When she made eye contact with it, it burst out laughing and fell over, thrashing wildly on the ground. She tapped her foot impatiently while she waited for it to calm down. Finally, it stopped.

    “Are you finished?” she asked.

    Out of breath, it stood. “Yes, yes, I’m sorry,” it said. “That was good stuff.”

    “I don’t see what’s so funny about it.”

    It mumbled something and snapped its mouth shut. Its cheeks filled with air and bubbled outward. A sound came from somewhere in its throat; and it struggled to hold it in, covering its mouth with its paw. It snorted; and instantly, it burst out laughing again and fell over once more.

    She huffed and rolled her eyes.

    Talking squirrels. Sure, it’s absurd; but it’s fun to write. What we see isn’t always the whole story; and when you’re a writer, the whole story is yours to tell.

    Ouch, my eye!

    The eyes experience all kinds of sensations: stinging, burning, watering, itching, throbbing – the list goes on. You might think that describing these sensations in writing would be challenging; but when readers are familiar with the sensation, it doesn’t take much for them to feel your pain.

    She gritted her teeth, watching the squirrel flip-flop like a fish out of water as it roared with laughter.

    “Stop it!” she yelled.

    It flopped more and laughed louder.

    She could feel the evil rising from within her gut and began to fantasize about all the horrible things she would do to the annoying creature.

    Finally, its punishment was clear. An evil grin spread across her face as she stretched her right leg behind her as far as she could and steadied herself. Just as she swung her leg forward, the breeze picked up, wiggling one of her eyelashes loose and planting it right in her eye. Distracted by the pain, her kick missed the squirrel. The evil grin dissolved into an expression of terror. Her left leg soon followed her right, and her entire body flew into the air. Arms and legs flailing, gravity pulled her down; and she landed with a thud flat on her back.

    “You missed!” it taunted, laughing again as it scurried away.

    She lay there defeated, covering one eye with her hand, and gazing at the beautiful blue sky with the other. She needed a new pastime.

    If you’ve never felt the pain from an eyelash floating around in your eye, then you’re one of the lucky ones. I know that most people have felt it, so I don’t need to attempt a detailed description of an eyelash and its evil plot to ruin your day.

    Final thoughts

    I bet you didn’t envision a talking squirrel while I was describing the sunrise, did you? If you did, then surely you couldn’t have imagined an eyelash determining the end of the story. Being unpredictable will keep your readers on their toes, even if the story is completely outrageous. In this one, the eyes have clearly done their job. They saw; they visualized; and they experienced trauma all in a few paragraphs.

    Thank you for reading, and I hope you enjoyed this post. If you missed parts one and two, they can be found here.

    Candidly yours,

    Copyright © 2022-2024 Irene Bratton

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    I am not a medical or legal professional. The information in this article is based solely on personal experience and my honest opinion. This article should not be considered either medical or legal advice, and may or may not be appropriate for your specific situation, the details of which are totally unknown to me.

    Accordingly, I cannot take responsibility for any adverse event which might occur if you choose to follow the advice given, in whole or in part, which you do at your own risk. Consider it “food for thought” rather than expert guidance.

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